Saturday, 23 October 2010

Write a sentence or two describing this stormy scene

Dear Class,

I really enjoyed reading your calm sea settings this week. Your half term challenge should you choose to accept it is.....
Write a sentence or a few sentences to describe this stormy sea scene.Ship in a storm
See if you can include any of the writing tricks we have learnt this half term.

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5 comments:

  1. Above the crashing waves, the crackling lightning lights up the scene.

    While the containership thunders through the
    rough sea,the sea smashes the side of the sturdy ship.
    Jack

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  2. Well done Jack
    I like your prepositional opening sentence starting with above. You have mentioned ship twice in your second sentence, what other word could you use instead?
    Excellent 1 *

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  3. I think i could use the word vessel.

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  4. Vessel is a great alternative to ship. Can you see any other words you have used twice?

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  5. In the great sea storm, the lightning that is brighter than the sun, crackles like a witch with a high picthed voice laughing cunningly. Meanwhile the sudden booms of heavy thunder makes the sailor panic cowardly. Also the moonlight blue waves whip each other aggresively.
    Eve

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